A Case Of Revenge: Scripting

A CASE OF REVENGE:  ORIGINAL SCRIPT

Madeline, the protagonist returns to the school, holding a briefcase, with the intentions of planting the bomb into the Head Teacher’s office.
As she is walking down the corridor, a series of flashbacks are revealed of why she is pursuing a chain of revenge plots against the teachers and students who she feels that have oppressed her into her current depressed state.

The first flashback is of a bully pushing Madeline against the wall.

Bully: (slow motion mouthing) You don’t belong here

The protagonist drops to the floor as she is verbally abused.

The sequence then continues back to the present; the protagonist is still walking down the corridor towards the Head Teacher’s office, still holding the brief case.

The second flashback is of the Head teacher taking the bully’s side over the protagonist.

(In the classroom) The class is silent and doing work, while the teacher is sitting at his desk marking papers. The bully and her friends are constantly poking and throwing things at the protagonist.

Bully: Oi! Loser.

Protagonist turns around and the bully and her friends suddenly pretend to be doing work.

Teacher: MADELINE! TURN AROUND AND DO YOUR WORK!

Madeline: But sir-

Teacher:  I don’t want to hear it, get on with your work

Madeline continues to do his work. Then the bullies start throwing things at her again.

Madeline:  (Turns around) Stop it!

Teacher: That’s it!

Madeline: I’m not doing anything! They’re throwing these pieces-

Teacher: NO. Enough with your excuses, get out. Those students behind have done nothing but do work all lesson. I’m sick and tired of you wasting my time and disrupting this lesson.

Back to the present; the protagonist continues through the corridor and walks into the Head teacher’s office, she puts the briefcase on the desk, exists the room, closing the door behind her and walks out; down the corridor once again.

 

With this script, we amended it in order to fit the appropriate thriller subgenre that we are aiming for. Also, we found that by using less speech and more film techniques we can reflect the mood and intentions of the protagonist without making it so obvious and underlined with dialect; we found that by using less speech we were able to create more of an effect of mystery, and with more cross-cutting we intend to make a connection with the briefcase and the office - creating the technique of enigmas, which is a key technique in the thriller genre.
Thus, here is the modified script:

 

 

A CASE OF REVENGE: MODIFIED SCRIPT

 

Madeline, the protagonist returns to the school, holding a briefcase, with the intentions of planting the bomb into the Head Teacher’s office.

As she is walking down the corridor, a series of flashbacks are revealed of why she is pursuing a chain of revenge plots against the teachers and students who she feels that have oppressed him into her current depressed state.

The first flashback is of a bully pushing the protagonist against the wall.

 

Madeline: (slow motion mouthing) You don’t belong here

 

The protagonist drops to the floor as she is verbally abused.

The sequence then continues back to the present; the protagonist is still walking down the corridor towards the Head Teacher’s office, still holding the brief case.

The second flashback is of the Head teacher taking the bully’s side over the protagonist.

(In the classroom) The class is silent and doing work, while the teacher is sitting at his desk marking papers. The bully and her friends are constantly poking and throwing things at the protagonist.

Protagonist turns around and the bully and her friends suddenly pretend to be doing work.

 

Teacher: MADELINE! TURN AROUND AND DO YOUR WORK!

Madeline: But sir-

Teacher:  I don’t want to hear it, get on with your work

 

Madeline continues to do her work. Then the bullies start throwing things at her again.

Back to the present; walking down the corridor, Madeline starts to hear mutters of laughter in her head, which then develops to an image of students surrounding her laughing and pointing. There is then a voice over of her own thoughts;

 

voice over: hahahahha yeh, laugh away.. lets see who gets the last laugh.

 

The protagonist continues through the corridor and walks into the Head teacher’s office, she puts the briefcase on the desk, exists the room, closing the door behind her and walks out; down the corridor once again.